另外，大家都喜歡介紹自己的學校，但是你的介紹要具體生動，不要總喜歡用什么prestigious和famous之類的話。有的同學這樣寫道：I went into a Univ. which won great reputation in telecommunication and IT field in China. 什么叫great reputation，有什么具體概念嗎？大家不用停留在介紹學校方面，應該通過這種介紹迅速轉入一點：你受到了high qualified的教育。

最大的問題，PS不要寫成流水帳，每個段落要有核心句子。比如有的同學這樣寫道：In the first year, I was just a discreet learner, following the teacher’s step steadily. The second year, leader’s work in student government cost most of my time, so I tried to be more efficient. 這根本就不是PS，只能算回憶錄。請注意：你要把最重要的信息放在段落的開頭和結尾（Put the most important sentences at the beginning and end of the paragraph. When people skim passages, they look at the first and then the last sentence. Make a good first and last impression with substantive statements. Don't begin or end on fluff.）。

第四，除非特別要求，不要寫成問答式的。有很多同學這樣寫：First, My old dream played a key role in my decision-making. 然后一大段介紹：Second, My solid academic background，然后下面再一大段，一直到第六個My Family background。還有的同學這樣寫：WHY IS MATHEMATICS? WHY ME？這絕對不是PS，千千萬萬要避免這種回答。如同華盛頓大學PS寫作要求中提到的（http://www.flytowest.com/ps/usps/wash.htm）Avoid overly common phrases and nonspecific information.（避免用那些太平常的詞組或者不具體的信息）。

第五，不要寫為國家和社會主義做貢獻之內的比較空泛的話。Besides traveling to Taiwan, realizing the importance of experiencing the real world, in the past three years, I have grasped every opportunity to travel far and observe the dynamic society and economy of China. 不要用同樣的句式，比如有的同學總是喜歡用impress deeply這樣的話，甚至一個段落中反復使用，要么就是不停地說intelligent。還有的就是句式雷同，Computer animation is my favorite and first choice，然后隔兩句就寫my primary and foremost interest lies in graphics and design。語言問題還有頭重腳輕，比如Most computer majors look over this task because they consider it too easy; nonetheless, I do not agree. 實際上，語言問題還是小問題。你可以花100元錢請個認真負責的老外，找個學校的角落修改一下，一邊communicate what you wish to say。實際上，關鍵的問題就是內容設置和結構布局。

（來源：網絡）