??????? 獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金申請(qǐng)文章在申請(qǐng)獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金過程中所起的作用遠(yuǎn)超過托福和GRE。要保證您的讀書計(jì)劃和推薦信獨(dú)樹一幟，獲得獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金評(píng)審委員會(huì)的刮目相看，可以參考以下的范例：

???????Growing up in a modest village in China, I hardly ever had the chance to see many examples of modern technology; people who dig wells by hand to obtain drinking water and use ox-driven plows to cultivate their fields don't have much use for televisions and personal computers. But when my father gave me an old radio to play with, I wanted nothing more than to take apart the contraption and see what inside made such interesting sounds. Sitting on the floor with a confused grin, surrounded by wires and metal, I looked up at my father and asked where the noises were...（有刪節(jié)）

???????合理地闡述了申請(qǐng)者學(xué)習(xí)電子工程的動(dòng)機(jī)，學(xué)習(xí)動(dòng)機(jī)是評(píng)審委員非?？粗械?。同時(shí)，讀了這段文字，會(huì)使讀者沉浸在對(duì)童年往事的美好回憶里，借此打動(dòng)評(píng)審委員的心。

???????另外一篇修改過的文章開頭用詩一般的語言寫道（有刪節(jié)）：

???????... I first read this paragraph from Madame Curie as a 14-year-old child, and I still remember how wonderful I felt. I remember thinking, "What esteemed men they were! How hard they worked!" As I grew older, this paragraph became a source of encouragement in the face of adversity. I begin to feel a magical blue light twinkling in my heart, kindling a love of science, and encouraging me to charge bravely into the unknown world.

???????結(jié)尾呼應(yīng)了開頭，闡述了作者為什么要去美國讀書：

???????I never forgot my adolescent idol, Maria Curie. As I re-read the book, another passage leaped out: "She was now 24 -- an age when some of her great contemporaries were to be on the brink of major discoveries... Maria took the train from Warsaw to Paris, the intellectual Mecca."

???????For me, the intellectual Mecca is the United States... I hope to continue my study and research, as detailed below. One day, I hope to find the pure esthetics of biology and reach its luminous summits.

???????我們可以想象得到，評(píng)審委員在讀了這位女士的申請(qǐng)文章以后，腦海里肯定能栩栩如生地浮現(xiàn)出一個(gè)好學(xué)上進(jìn)、充滿遠(yuǎn)大抱負(fù)的未來女科學(xué)家的形象，怎么會(huì)不拍案叫絕，全力幫助這位女士登上前往學(xué)術(shù)圣地美利堅(jiān)的飛機(jī)，成為第二個(gè)居里夫人呢?

（來源：網(wǎng)絡(luò)）